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Thursday, January 29, 2009

Dieing Love -Freewrite-

Refined version
(See original below)
Talk, while you sit here...
show me a rose my color,
show me where the sun's
tears fall, where
rain swells with pride
and journey's through
its desert heart.
Please, cry too;
for you know I will
leave soon, my time is coming
like nightfall, unstoppable.
Wavering on the edge,
balancing on my life's fence
as horses gallop by...
handsome cowboys shouts
ignite a jealousy in your eyes.
But you're in your own world
most of the time, why must I wait,
how long must I wait?
Watching you there by the window,
I notice your blond hair is darker,
your face too, unshaven and dark.
I hear you laugh, I laugh too;
at what I don't know, there is no
joy here anymore, no more a smile
just to pass the time.
I pass you on your way,
but you don't see how around corners
shadows run, stumbling intoxicated...
feel me now, know me now, see me now...
I'm slipping away, away down into the waves
my hands tied, my heart slowing.
It will stop soon, I will stop;
it is the nature of things.
I will go in peace, in happiness
with a smile and a simple laugh
like when I would spend afternoons
gazing into your cloudless eyes.

Original
talk a while sitting here
show me a rose my color, show me where the sun
cries a tear for me...and rain
swells with pride to journey through its desert heart.
cry too, for you know i will leave
my time is coming , it is coming like night
no one could stop it...wavering on the edge
balancing on a ranch fence as horses gallop by,
handsome cowboys shouting,
i can see the jealousy in your eyes,
but you're in your own world most of the time
why must I wait, how long must i wait.
watching you there by the window, blond hair
darker now, your face too, unshaven and dark.
i hear you laugh, i laugh too but i don't know why,
there is no joy here anymore, no more a smile
just to pass the time. I'll pass you on your way
but you don't see...around corners
shadows run, but they'll stumble, intoxicated.
feel me now, know me now, see me now!
i'm slipping away, away down into the waves,
my hands tied my heart slowing, it will stop soon
and i will stop, it is the nature of things.
i will go in peace, in happiness with a smile
and a simple laugh, like when i would
spend afternoons gazing into your cloudless eyes.

3 comments:

Every Photo Tells A Story said...

Beautiful and heartbreaking, Sarah-Page!

CathM said...

I like the fluidity of this second revision. It comes over as softer, somehow... lovely!

CLAY said...

Very haunting piece miss Paige. Splendid.

Ever Yours,
Clay Darrow